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Monday, May 4, 2026

Someone else reading

I found a reader online who is reading the manuscript now. Not the best way to get feedback, but the best I'm going to get at this point.

At the moment, I'm working through the remaining ten or so agents with my query letter in an effort to see if any of them want to read Toe the Line. Based on the writer's conference I attended, I should get one out of the ten to read it. Is that right? Or did he say one out of six. I don't know if I have much chance if it's one out of six! I'd be ecstatic with one of out six.

Regardless, I'm editing my previous novel. I figured with the up and coming birth of the next baby, starting a new novel would not be worthwhile. It will have to wait till next NaNoWriMo. So, I'm editing On the Edge. It's going well. Another long hard slog.

Update


So, here is a quick update.

Toe the Line
I'm still sending out requests for representation to agents. I recieved to negatives yesterday. I am working at a pace of one request per week and easily have enough prospects to last the rest of the year.
My roommate read Toe the Line and was quite enthusiastic about it. She had some edits, but she loved the last few lines the most. Almost gushed.
A friend of mine also read the manuscript, she too liked it.
JA Konrath spent nine years sending out requests before finally getting a positive . . . I'm not through with year one yet.

Muzzie's Memoirs
Muzzie is exceedingly frustrated and frustrating. I can't tell how she wants to proceed. We're about 50K words into her manuscript and she is talking about starting over. She says she doesn't find it worth reading or exciting. I bite my tongue when I want to reply with "well, it's your life."
One of her favorite things to write is: "There was much hugging and kissing, and love all around." She never says this, but she writes it alot. Pehaps the title should be "Love all around" or "Love all Around Me."
I completely deleted the paragraph long description and explanation regarding her episiotomy. I'll save the rest of the family that particular horror and bare the burden myself.
Nevertheless, I plan on finished the first draft edit and sending it to her in paper format by the end of the week. Needless to say this has slowed down my editing of Running on the Edge.


Running on the Edge
I wrote this three years ago. It's about an adventure race in Big Bend. I'm rewriting/editing it and boy it's a ton better following the rewrite. Much better characters, new twists, new plots. I plan on being done by August so I can get ready for NaNoWriMo next year.
My hope is that when I run out of agents for Toe the Line, I'll be ready to start again with Running on the Edge.

So that's how things are going.


Failed to Set the Hook

I despise fishing. Have never liked it. As a child I saw a short film about fishing that completely shaped and encapsulated perfectly my views of fishing.

A man is walking along the edge of a lake, just meandering along. He looks down and see a candy bar on the ground. He picks it up, examines it, and deciding that nothing is wrong with it, he tears it open and takes a bite.

He chews for a bit, then he starts to gag. As he begins to gag the end of a hook appears in the side of his cheek and fishing wire dangles from his mouth. He drops the candy bar and begins to try and free himself from the hook, but the fishing line goes taut and begins to pull him towards the lake.

He struggles and struggles but is eventually pulled down into the lake, under the water, by the fishing line. A few seconds pass, we see the man's last few bubbles of life flit away, the water's surface calms, then up from out of the lake, another candy bar is thrown onto the ground. That little scene has stayed with me for years.

Despite my hatred for fishing, I do see the need to use fishing terms and analogies from time to time. My last; A nibble, from a few posts ago. Now, Failed to set the hook.

The agent who asked for my first ten pages has decided not to ask for the rest of the manuscript. Crushing defeat. BUT, I look on the bright side and realize, I just re-read my book and found errors that I otherwise would not have found . . . so (like Bill Murray says in Caddy Shack when he is talks about how he got eternal life as a tip for his caddying for the Dali Lama) I got that going for me.

Book Review: Writing the Breakout Novel

Finished reading Donald Maass’, Writing the Breakout Novel. This is without hyperbole the best book on the craft of writing I’ve read yet. I have found that most of these craft books all say the same thing….character is key, increase conflict, yada, yada, yada. Although Writing the Breakout Novel includes many of these same tips, Maass provides quite a bit more, and most importantly delivers it an extremely easy manner.

There were times in college when I would be blessed with spectacular professors (a rare event in the Texas A&M English Dept). These professors seemed to be speaking directly to me, when in fact I was just one of hundreds in the auditorium. They were the professors of the classes that I looked forward to attending (and were usually spot-lighted by the atrocious professors in the History Dept). Reading Writing the Breakout Novel made me feel as if I was in one of those spectacular classes again.

A short snippet and some of his advice? “A breakout novelist is somewhat maniacal, possibly even sadistic. They discover what is the worst that can happen then make matters worse still.”
The book is filled with great passages that are both insightful and are fun to read.

Maass also stocks the book with passages from books that are representative of breakout novels. A great one, and one I intend to mimic in my book, On the Edge:

“I used to think that a fall was more than likely not the result of one stupendous error, or an unfortunate accident. I hadn’t learned that it can happen so gradually you don’t lose your stomach or yourself landing. You don’t necessarily sense the motion. I’ve found it takes at least two and generally three things to alter the course of a life: you slip around the truth once and then again, and one more time, and there you are, feeling, for a moment, that it was sudden, your arrival at the bottom of the heap.”
Jane Hamilton’s A Map of the World

One of these passages was particularly memorable if only because I remember reading it years ago when I read Snowcrash, and I liked it even then. It’s about a pizza deliver man’s car in the near (dystopian) future.

The Deliverator’s car has enough potential energy packed into its batteries to fire a pound of bacon into the asteroid belt. Unlike a bimbo box or a Burb beater, the Deliverator’s car unloads that power through gaping, gleaming, polished sphincters. When the Deliverator puts the hammer down, shit happens. You want to talk contact patches? Your car’s tires have tiny contact patches; talk to the asphalt in four places the size of your tongue. The Deliverator’s car has big sticky tires with contact patches the size of a fat lady’s thighs. The Deliverator is in touch with the road, starts like a bad day, stops on a peseta.
Neal Stephenson’s Snowcrash

Finally, I was astounded by how many of the breakout novels he cited that I have read. One that I apparently need to get, and very soon, is Shogun. He cited that more than any other novel.

Basically, I went into Writing the Breakout not looking forward to it, and thinking that perhaps it wouldn’t be geared to my particular capabilities as a writer. I was wrong. Not only did it have a strong message and easy to read content, but I would recommend it to new writers and experienced authors alike.

eReaders

Article in the Houston Chronicle this morning caught my eye. It was all about the impending release of the iPad into the eReader market. What was astounding to me was the number of eReaders already on the market. I knew about the Kindle, as I own one (and enjoy it much more than I thought I would), I knew about the Nook and the iPad. I wrote about the iRex a view weeks back when it was reviewed in the WSJ, but it's the others that surprised me.

• Amazon Kindle - Pro: Huge e-book library. Con: Not a touch screen.

• Sony Reader Touch Edition - Pro: Touch screen; small, lightweight, sturdy. Con: E Ink display is a little light.

• Sony Reader Pocket Edition - Pro: Lightweight, fits in pocket or small purse. Con: Holds only 350 books.

• Barnes & Noble nook - Pro: Touch screen below main screen. Con: Small virtual keyboard.

• enTourage eDGe - Pro: Read e-books, surf Internet, send e-mails, watch movies. Con: Big, heavy as a laptop.

• Interead COOL-ER - Pro: Similar to Kindle and nook; bold colors; long-lasting charge. Con: Very basic.


Coming soon

• Apple iPad - Pro: Backlit, color, multi-touch screen; thin and light; could replace some laptops. Con: Relatively expensive; multiple bookstore applications may overwhelm consumers.

• Kobo eReader - Pro: Comes loaded with 100 classic books; can synch library to computer. Cons: No 3G connectivity.

• Que proReader - Pro: Reads a range of things from ePub to Power Point presentations. Con: Expensive; keeps getting delayed.

• Skiff Reader - Pro: 11.5-inch screen makes it easy to read newspapers and magazines. Con: Size could make it cumbersome.

One other aspect of this article that caught my eye was the con under the Kindle. Personally, and I'm speaking as a person who works at a tech company were our products use touchscreen, I'm glad that the Kindle doesn't have a touchscreen. It's not hard to press page forward, and I always find my fat fingers fumbling over the touchscreen here at work. I don't want that when I read. If I was to put a con up there for Kindle? Lack of a backlight. How can I be expected to read while my 6 week old baby goes to sleep if I have to have all the lights on. Come on Amazon, you can do better than that.

Chewing on Things

I'm continually amazed by how problems get resolved the longer I just keep them in the back of my mind. It's as if my sub-conscious (or is it unconscious) mind is chewing on the problems for me and then, when that part of my mind has come to a conclusion it releases all of its good ideas in one huge tidal wave of ideas. Like the final few scenes of the movie, 2001 A Space Odyssey when Dave Bowman is racing through the cosmos, all of the color and shapes are bombarding him while he sits immobile in the shuttle, just taking it all in, astounded.

I've been trying to figure out several themes and aspects of my next novel, Off the Edge, that could make it more believable, deeper, something closer to what Donald Maass described in Writing the Breakout Novel. All of a sudden, this morning in the shower, that flood of ideas hit, one after the other, each one leading to the next, each a bit more concise and detailed than the last. First thing I did was run to my notebook and jot it all down.

When I was younger I read most of Stephen King's books. I was always intrigued by his stories and wondered at that time what his dreams must be like. I was sure that the only way he could come up with such interesting ideas was through his interesting dreams and nightmares. I know now that the concepts of his books were quite rudimentary (a poltergeist, vampires, haunted house), and that the process of writing generally leads to deeper, more well fleshed out works.

More than anything else I'm glad I started toting a notebook around with me everywhere I go. It has been invaluable for capturing these bursts of inspiration that my sub-conscious mind spit out every now and then.

Online Critique Group

A few weeks ago I joined an online writing group (The Mystery Writer's Critique Group). This is perhaps the most stringent online writing group I have ever come across. Usually online writing groups are quite loosely organized and lack a purpose or direction. This group is different. There are only about twenty members, small for a nationwide group, and they demand that prior to uploading a chapter for critique by the other members, you must first critique three chapters yourself. Two days ago I finished critiquing my third chapter for other members.

The first story I read was a romance. It was about an older woman who is gradually rediscovering the ability to love following the death of her husband. The chapter I read focused primarily on her experiences at a bridge tournament. If nothing else this exercise in critiquing the story revealed to me that describing bridge hands in too much detail will bore a reader. This was not a lesson I needed to learn. I believe I knew that innately. Sadly, the other two chapters were far less memorable. But, they did provide me the opportunity to upload my own work, so I soldiered through them perfunctorily.

With a great degree of trepidation I uploaded chapter 1 of my second novel, tentatively titled, On the Edge. I was surprised by the speed with which my opening chapter was critiqued. In less than two hours I had three critiques of the chapter uploaded to my folder. It was like sharks swirling around chum they came and critiqued so fast. This fact alone worried me that perhaps my new editors would be as quick to read my chapter as I had been to read theirs. I needn’t have worried.

It’s always unnerving to have other people read your work then comment on it. After the immediate defensiveness wore off, I realized that the edits the members of the group provided were far more substantial, and far more thoughtful than anything I’d ever gotten from the Sugar Land Writers group. They were also much more complete than the edits I had provided, a reminder to do a better job in my future critiques. My new editors provided several quite specific edits regarding pacing and theme that I think I will be able to incorporate in the chapter. Additionally, and I found this surprising, all of them left notes at the end of the story with some compliments. I will remember this technique in future critiques. Soften the blow and helps the author understand the critiques objectives. All in all the experience left me more excited about the prospects of continuing with this group as well as a bit humbled.

I’ve always been a fan of critique groups and have generally elevated in person groups above online ones based on my past experiences with the two. I have to admit that the ranking has now flip flopped, and that should have a positive impact on my future writing.

Modeling

My newest novel, the one that I am currently working on, features a main character who among other things, has a hang up about modeling. He works as a model builder and is somewhat obsessed with building models.

The Wall Street Journal featured an article today (link to article) about Goodyear and their model room. Apparently the Goodyear headquarters building has an 8400 square foot room that was built to hold scale modes of all of their factories. These models were built before the company had access to computer renderings and other drafting devices that we have today. It allowed the senior executives the ability to see what their new factories would look like, and to show off to corporate guests.

Now, Goodyear is building a new headquarters building and they aren't planning on keeping the models. They don't even budget anymore for their upkeep. The article interviews the model maker and he has the chance to tour his models one last time before who knows what happens.

BUT, the reason this caught my eye is that it offered me yet another insight into my novel. I have been chewing on the denouement of Off the Edge, trying to figure out how it should end, this article helped inspire the end. You never know where or when inspiration will strike, but it's a good bet that the more your mind stirs about it, the sooner it will come.

Desperately Seeking a More Attractive Timbre

This might turn out to be a long, tangential post, but in terms of the writing process it could be interesting. (Talk about an uninspiring first line!)

A few weeks ago my cell phone broke. It crashed on the golf course and I don't really blame it. I was involved in a sales event for work, a tournament that lasted over 6 hours. By the 18th hole I actually envied my cell phone's death.

It was my intention, prior to its passing, to wait until Verizon started carrying the iPhone before buying a new phone. The demise of "old faithful" forced my hand and I lost the luxury of choosing my own schedule for phone replacement. So, naturally, the iPhone not being an option, I went and bought a new fangled DROID phone. I like it. It's pretty handy to have around, and soon it should double as a Kindle eReader. Presently it lacks that eReading application, but I have made great use of another feature.

Years ago, during my long commutes from Halliburton up by the airport to my house down in Sugar Land (Houstonians will audibly groan when they read about that commute), I played with the idea of using a voice recorder to write my stories orally. It's hard not to think of ways to wisely use commuting time when you have over an hour of it each way. Despite a year of driving that commute to work, I never followed through with any of my voice recording plans.

Then, with my grandmother Muzzie needing help on her memoir, oral story-telling once again raised its head. For months I traipsed over to Muzzie's to record her stories into my computer. At home I would transcribe then edit her words and despite her critique, I think I gave her stories a pretty good home in a pseudo-memoir.

Now, thanks to the voice recording capability on my new DROID phone, I am once again finding the benefits of oral story-telling. My commute time is far less, only about 15 minutes, but that is just enough time for me to speak out a few pages of text. So far I like what I see. I tend to be far more succinct when I talk a story than when I type one. I felt I was bogging down in the details of the race described in "Off the Edge", the novel I'm in the midst of writing. I felt like I was mired in things that didn't matter. Speaking the story off the top of my head into the recorder tends to keep me on track.

Although I've only kept at it for a few days, to this point I'm impressed with the changes I'm seeing. I'm far more pithy and concise when I have to speak the story. If only I could do something about that awkward sounding voice. Perhaps a nose job will provide me with a more attractive timbre.

Book Review: Catch-22 - Who Knew a Word Like Infundibuliform Even Existed?

Finished Catch-22 last week. If you read this blog you knew I was reading it based on this post about déjà vu. Also if you read this blog you’ll know that my book reviews aren’t book reviews per se where I recommend reading or not reading the book, or discuss it’s strengths and weakness. I might do that, but in general, my aim is to pick out the words, phrases and passages that catch my eye and mark them down so I can better remember them. That being said; Catch-22 is a terrific book to read in terms of vocabulary. The below are just a small sampling:

Infundibuliform - shaped like a funnel

Denudate – to lay bare by erosion

Otiose- producing no useful result; futile

Argosies - a fleet of ships; a rich supply

Fustian - a strong cotton and linen fabric; a class of cotton fabrics usually having a pile face and twill weave; high-flown or affected writing or speech; broadly; anything high-flown or affected in style

Callipygous- having shapely buttocks

And, perhaps the most apropos word in Catch-22 as it so elegantly states the Yosarian’s nature in one word:

Captious- marked by an often ill-natured inclination to stress faults and raise objections ;calculated to confuse, entrap, or entangle in argument

As I said in my previous post, I remembered many of the lines and the same is true of the vocabulary words. I recall asking my grandfather about the word fustian. He didn’t know the definition. I believe he made me go look it up.

I also remember several passages, including this one about one of my favorite characters, Major Major Major Major:
“Major Major had been born too late and too mediocre. Some men are born mediocre, some men achieved mediocrity, and some men have mediocrity thrust upon them. With Major Major it had been all three. Even among men lacking all distinction he inevitably stood out as a man lacking more distinction than all the rest, and people who met him were always impressed by how unimpressive he was.”

When describing Doc Daneeka, Heller writes:
“He was like a man who had grown frozen with horror once and had never come completely unthawed”

My question, shouldn’t it be “thawed?” I mean unthawed is frozen, right? You thaw a steak to make it not frozen?

Finally, a rather significant scene occurs when a naked Yossarian is sitting up in a tree watching Snowden’s funeral. Milo comes to hang out with him and the following passage appears:
“Milo was stung and made no effort to disguise his wounded feelings. It was a muggy, moonlit night filled with gnats, moths, and mosquitos. Milo lifted his arm suddenly and pointed toward the open-air theater, where the milky dust-filled beam bursting horizontally from the projector slashed a conelike swath in the blackness and draped in a fluorescent membrane of light the audience titled on the seats in hypnotic sages, their faces focused upward toward the aluminized move screen. Milio’s eyes were liquid with integrity, and his artless uncorrupted face was lustrous with a shining mixture of sweat and insect repellant.”

I liked it for those final two words. Writing “insect repellant” seems to thrown the whole passage off kilter. Makes the reader wonder why it was used at all.

“The floor swayed like the floating raft at the beach and the stitches on the inside of his thigh bit into his flesh like fine set of fish teeth as he limped across the aisle.”

Great simile that…..like fine set of fish teeth. Perfectly describes stitches.

The final passage was used when Yossarian had to deal with a new group of young roommates.
“He could not make the shut up; they were worse then women, they had not brains enough to be introverted and repressed.”

What I find the most interesting part about this book, and other Heller books is the way in which the ending is revealed at the beginning of the book. For the entire book the reader knows that Yossarian is struggling with Snowden’s death. The reader even knows how and when it happened. The final reveal is minor but significant in putting the entire puzzle together. It’s similar to most of Heller’s other books I feel, particularly “Something Happened.” But, it has helped me. I’ve been having trouble dealing with a similar aspect in my own manuscrip, On Edge. Perhaps I should take a cue from Heller. Instead of hiding it from the reader, just let them know a good part of it right up front, let a detail or two fall throughout the story, then reveal the entirety at the end.

Nevertheless, fun to read if you like long, run on sentences, confusing arguments, and words like callipygous.

An Apple A Day

Yesterday was an Apple heavy day. My older brother offered me an AppleTV. Don't know what I'm going to do with it. I don't have an HDTV. Even if I had an HDTV, I'm not sure what I'd do with it. I look forward to finding out though.

I also spoke with a client. He came into my office and mocked my PC. He has several Apple products, several meaning a dozen. An iPad for each kid, iPhones for the kids, couple of laptops, iMac, Apple server, a real connoisseur. We eventually got around to discussing Steve Jobs. I've just finished a book about how to give a presentation like Steve Jobs and in the book the author goes into great detail about the product rollout presentations that Jobs conducted. This client thought that Apple's days would be numbered without Jobs. We both agreed that what we liked most about Apple was that it was cutting edge, iPod, iPhone, iTunes both cutting edge technologies. How astonished was I to read an article (here) entitled "How Apple Foot-Dragged to Victory - Steve Jobs's formula for success: Don't Rush" by Holman Jenkins, Jr. in the Wall Street Journal.

In this article, which is a compelling read, Mr. Jenkins argues that it was not the pace of innovation that made Apple so successful, it was the way in which they innovated and the design behind the innovations.

"Let's try out a hypothesis: Mr. Jobs's slowness is the key to Apple's success. His focus on the device, his emphasis on perfecting the user experience, meant holding back, not overreaching. The iPod would only be a music player. The iPhone and iPad would be Web-browsing devices that wouldn't play most of the video on the Web. Apple TV remains "a hobby" (his words) because there's no way yet to deliver an acceptable user experience. And notice that each of these device categories had been around for five or 10 years by the time Apple entered (clobbered) them."

It's an interesting train of thought to take, and the article is quite convincing. Much more emphasis on design and function than on revolutionary devices. Perhaps its not the revolutionary the piece of equipment is designed to address, but it's the design of the equipment that makes it revolutionary. Kinda like what Chris said in Northern Exposure when he used a catapualt to launch a piano: "It's not the thing you fling, it's the fling itself."

Back to my client? What about the future of Apple. Jenkins offers this.

"Of course, this fundamental strategy orientation might now change. Apple has allowed itself to be drawn into a battle for mobile-platform market share with Google's Android. Apple's management is increasingly focused on growing an ecosystem rather than on creating devices. The Microsofting of Apple may be at hand, the company becoming a feckless and inefficient user of capital as it seeks to protect itself on every front from every perceived threat to its privileged position. Before long, Apple might even need a Steve Jobs to come back and save it again."

Great Article on Story Planning

Although I've never read any of his books, his article makes me want to. This article (here) Facing the Hard Questions Before Chapter One by Len Deighton I thought was a fantastic and inspirational primer on writing novels. The novels I've written have been anything but planned. I hope to change all this. This article might be the catalyst.

In the past I've worked the Nano way; throwing anything and everything down on the paper as quickly as I can. This has lead to seven extrememly rough drafts and 1.5 finished novels. I'm thinking that I need to try and slow down and follow the advice of Mr. Deighton and Robert W. Walker advocated in Dead On Writing (The How-To Book to Die For). His writing style was a "wave style" as he called it. He would write chapter 1 then he'd go back, edit it, and continue on to chapter 2. Then he'd go back to Chapter 1, edit Chapters 1 and 2 and then writer 3. He'd advance by going back first, editing the chapters before, then writing the next.

I think I'll use the advice of both these two and see if I can't make a bigger dent in #2, On Edge.

Book Review: Rain Storm

I just finished reading the third John Rain thriller, Rain Storm. I'm getting tired of saying this, but I love these books. They are terrific thrillers and I think I've said it before, its so rare to read a good thriller that's written in the first person.

In this story, John Rain is found in Brazil, by the CIA, and begin working for them again. He meets up with another assassin who is trying to get to the same target he is after, and she happens to be a beautiful blonde (how prosaic). This was a bit of a surprise from Barry Eisler. He's full of formulaic characters, but for the most part he avoids patently obvious formulas. The girl in this was a bit too obvious, particularly when the love interest in the past two have been so deeply fleshed out and different. Viva la difference, Barry!

Despite this, the story is a fast one to read and spectacularly engaging. There were a couple of terrific passages and vocabulary, as usual, which I marked, also as usual.

Atavism: Relating to or characterized by reversion to something ancient or ancestral.

Senescent: The condition or process of deterioration with age.

Like Goldfinger, a lot of the first part of the story is wrapped up in gambling. I found some of these intriguing.

"We moved with them, past gamblers flush with fresh winnings, whome the girls eyed with bold invitation, eager to retrieve a few floating scraps from the casino food chain; pas middle-aged men from Hong Kong and Taiwan with sagging bodies and febrile eyes, their postures rigid, caught in some grim purgatory between sexual urgency and commercial calculation; past security guards, inured to the charms of the girls' bare legs and bold decolletage and interested only in keeping them moving, circling, forever swimming through the murk of the endless Lisboa night."

When I got to this section of the story I actually went back and read some of Casino Royale for it's terrific description of baccarat.

"I played baccarat at the upscale Bellagio; roulette at the off-strip Rio; craps at the fading Riviera, whose attempts to match the gayness and glitter around her felt forced, artificial, like makeup layered on by a woman who recognizes that she was never beautiful to begin with and has now, in addition, grown colorless an old."

I liked the way he made the tide sound like a defeated army.

"The rain had stopped and we strolled down to the edge of the water. The tide was receding, giving up wet sand like a defeated army abandoning terrain it could no longer control."

I thought it was interesting that he referenced Ian Fleming in the book, and right after I used him as a reference.

"What did Ian Fleming say? Once is happenstance, twice is coincidence, three times is enemy action. And I don't believe in waiting for even that much evidence. It was pas time to act."

Finally, I loved the metaphor using the umbrellas.

"From Narita, I took a Narita Express train to Tokyo station, where I emerged to find my former city hunched up against characteristically rainy and cold late autumn weather. I stood under the portico roof at the station's Marunouchi entrance and took in the scene. Waves of black umbrellas bobbed before me. Wet leaves were plastered to the pavement, ground in by the tires of oblivious cars and the soles of insensate pedestrians, by the weight of the entire, indifferent metropolis."

A strong and fun book, as fun as the last two. I look forward to the next.

Yet Another Reason to Hurry the Hell Up with my Edit

So, I'm just out of the valley of despair that came with no longer reading and trying to get my editing done on my current novel, On Edge. However, I've discovered another wrinkle to this strict diet of no novel reading.

I began working on my outline for the upcoming NaNo and realized that I need to read a 3rd Person POV Thriller to get in the groove. All this time I've been reading 1st Person POV mysteries for On Edge, but because this new novel is in 3rd, I need to hurry up and finish so I can get some reading in, get in the right frame of mind, for NaNo in November.

I know it may not be the most kosher act, reading others books in order to ensure I have an appropriate frame of mind. Kinda works counter to finding ones own voice and all that. But I find it helps me de-clutter my mind and slip into the right focus if I read some novels similar to what I'd want to write.

As that is the case, you'll excuse me while I go whip this book out.

Focus Not on Who They Are, Rather Think About Who They Can Become

I read a short article in last month's Writer's Digest about how to make write more engaging and intriguing protagonists. The article was titled Craft Your Character's Transformations and it was written by Jeff Gerke. Not a bad article, far better than the preceding article which I stopped reading after just the second sentence, 4 Rules for Sci-Fi & Fantasy Protagonists (seriously, how many werewolf stories can there be?), but one line caught my eye and stuck with me.

Included in the final few passages, after describing how protagonists should go through an inner journey that takes them from an Initial Condition (or knot) through Inciting Event, Escalation, Moment of Truth to Final State, he writes how a writer should think about their characters.

"When you're concepting your character, you might be tempted to think only about who a character is. But to keep your characters interesting you must also think about what your character can become. Given this starting point, this temperament, and these layers, how will this character respond when shown she's wrong or dysfunctional in some way and offered a better alternative. People don't like to change. It's so much easier to stay as we are, even if it's hurting us. In fiction, as in life, people resist change."

Notwithstanding the fact that he used a word like "concepting" to describe creating a character, the author writes something quite poignant in those first two sentences. There is a change similar to the "Inner Journey" I outlined above for my character in the novel I'm currently completing, On the Edge. How much more exciting might that inner journey have been had I started with the idea of who my character can become rather than who he is. Something to remember for my editing.

I Like the Sub-Heading Better

The article Digging Up the Depths of Desire by Ellis Avery (here) in Saturday's WSJ was worth reading, although I liked the secondary title more; Motivated Characters Motivate Readers. I love this section of the Weekend Journal. I look for it and read it each week. Sometimes I don't care for the advice, but most of the times I do. Today's was a positive.

Ellis Avery says that it's important to point out to readers the characters motivation to make the reader care and continue to read. I agree and for the most part I've tried to do that in my novel Toe the Line. I haven't done that enough in On the Edge so it's a good thing I read this article prior to my second edit. It gives me something to add in and will definitely add to the story. It's not that there isn't any motivation, it's just a tad disjoint and disparate. I need to fine tune it a bit. As she says:

"Finally, because it will keep you from getting stuck with a two-dimensional character, give him or her a stack of desires, and reveal those desires one at a time. Before the grandmother begs The Misfit for her life (in Flannery O'Connor's story A Good Man Is Hard to Find), she wants to impress him with her perspicacity; she wants to find a beloved old plantation house; she wants to smuggle her cat on a car trip."

I have a stack of desires for my main character, I just need to shine a bit brighter light on them and make them a tad more prescient.

Like I stated above, the Weekend Journal always has an article on writing, usually they are pretty good, they're always worth a once over.

Certainly Leaves a Fellow Wanting More

I just finished The Girl Who Played with Fire, the last line certainly leaves one looking forward to the next in the series.

"For a moment he stood as if petrified, staring at her mangled body. He noticed that she was holding a pistol in her hand, which hung loosely off the edge of the bench. He went to her side and sank to his knees. He thought about how he had found Svensson and Johansson and thought that she was dead too. Then he saw a slight movement in her chest and heard a feeble, wheezing breath. He reached out his hand and carefully loosened the gun from her grip. Suddenly her fist tightened around its butt. She opened her eyes to two narrow slits and stared at him for many long seconds. Her eyes were unfocused. Then he heard her mutter in such a low voice that he could only with difficulty catch the words. Kalle Fucking Blomkvist. She closed her eyes and let go of the gun. He put it on the floor, took out his mobile, and dialled the number for emergency services."

Larsson, Stieg - The Girl Who Played with Fire

Thursday, June 27, 2024

Reviews Keep Coming

Whenever I need a bit of a lift, I go and check some of the reviews for my novels. Always give me a bit of a pick me up, unless there are negatives. Thank goodness those are few and far between. 


So, if Norm wants to say Vapor Trail (HERE) "unputdownable"  and that it "keeps you on the edge of your seat". . . who am I to argue with him? He seems very intelligent!

Thursday, January 4, 2024

A Duller Discount

Anyone who wants to purchase my novels, feel free to contact me HERE or to purchase them full price . . . you can go to Amazon, HERE.


For those of you new to this experience, I have four novels, all thrillers for sure . . . well, maybe not thrillers, but definitely not dullers!

Tuesday, March 14, 2023

Culture of Silence

My class had a chance to discuss unequal social relations. Specifically, we discussed how this can create a "culture of silence" that instills the oppressed with a negative, passive, and suppressed self-image.


I work at a training non-profit where we deliver training to workers in the energy industry. We are seeing a bit of a revolution in how we approach, train, and accept non-native English speakers. These workers have certainly been a group that is not one with power and privilege in our community. In fact, they have been excluded from work in our industry due to safety concerns around their language skills. This is all changing. 

But, there is definitely a "culture of silence" that leads them to have a passive response and approach to training and to the industry. Goodman (2012) writes that the more dominant groups in a society, in this case, English speakers, and for the most part white, English-speaking men, inherently create systems that reinforce their more dominant roles. This has certainly been the case in our community. What's startling is to be on the leading edge of supporting the change in our community, especially in terms of training. The question I might have is how will these changes to this group of workers effect there self-image? How will they become less passive? Less negative? How might they become more effective and emboldened?

Reference

Goodman, D. J. (2012). Promoting diversity and social justice: Educating people from privileged groups. SAGE Publications.